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- Why are measurements in parenthesis? It's pretty crucial information.
- I believe this was suggested by a reviewer, I removed parentheses around body length, would you recommend removing from all measurements?
- Why do measurements only have conversions in the intro and not in the article body?
- If conversions were given, the entire article would be a mess of numbers. Would it be preferential to simply remove conversions in lead and keep it metric? I would prefer to give the conversion in the lead only (as it is now) but I'm not fixed on this idea and will change if you recommend complete removal.
- "The host range is very limited, being an endangered species" This reads as of the range is an endangered species. Either say "host's" or add the name of the host.
- "a proboscis armed with hooks which it uses to pierce and hold the rectal wall of its host, and a short, wide trunk. The proboscis is armed with 40 to 45 hooks" Repetitive. Seems these two consecutive sentences could be consolidated.
- "The worms are about 4 millimetres (0.2 in) long and 2 millimetres (0.08 in) wide." You could state there in the intro that the male is slightly larger.
- In the article doi:10.1654/1525-2647-85.1.95, Smales et al. discuss a specimen of Oligacanthorhynchidae they found in a South African rock monitor, not identified to a specific genus or species, which they compare to Heptamegacanthus, noting a difference in the number of total hooks (40–45 vs. 24). I don't know if this a worth a mention in this article, but since the literature is so sparse on this topic I thought I'd mention it